Peer Review Comments

Here are the comments I left for my tablemates' rough drafts...

For Peter:
I think that you should introduce the questions that you are answering because it seems like you are only answering one sentence. I think that you could incorporate that into your intro paragraph. I think that you included a good summary about the girls relationship with her family and the struggles that she went through. Your ideas were good and the paragraphs transitioned from one another so it was good. I just think that you could go further in about the character and how relationship with others might impact them. Your conclusion was good because it introduced the overall idea that was expressed.

For Vanessa:
I think your essay was very strong at the beginning, but it got choppy in the middle; the part that says you finish your book. It might need a transition and I think that you could also mention your ideas in your second part in your introduction so that it could be more clear. As a sum up, I think that you did a great job connecting the points. It just needs some transition and I think that the conclusion could summarize all of your points so that it would be more clear. In conclusion it was a good essay, and it just needs some editing to make it flow and ideas connected. 

For Grizzell:
I thought that it was a pretty good book review and you expressed your ideas pretty well, but at some parts was kind of confusing. I think that you should move your paragraphs around so that it would flow more better and cut down one of your body paragraphs into two parts because too much ideas are in it. It makes your point unclear. I thought at you included a good summary of the book and I think you could add one more quote to support some of your points. Your conclusion was good and it summarized your book.